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posted by [identity profile] emmuzka.livejournal.com at 04:27pm on 25/03/2008
I loved the "ARGH! STRESS!!"-feeling of Patrick in this fic. The leashing out and freaking out. Also, Pete was presented in a way that say right away to me "Asperger's syndrome!", which kinda fits. Story-vise, the first part of the story that happens in the Wentz residence does not, imho, fit very well in the overall story. Maybe it's too long, or doesn't carry the story line forward much. It doesn't set a clear premise on what the story line is, so it hints that the story would be a mood/periodic piece and not a whole story like it ends up to be. Sorry for not being more clear on this.
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posted by [identity profile] ethrosdemon.livejournal.com at 04:49pm on 25/03/2008
I'm sorry the story doesn't work for you. Hm, I don't really write fic w/ a X, Y, Z plot. I write more organic stories that are a sort of peek into someone's life. I like to read the other kind of story myself sometimes, so I understand your frustration. But overall, I just don't bring that kind of story, you know? The first part is Patrick as a normal dude, the rest is Patrick as a dude in a band...they are the same guy, and it's all normal for him, but he's struggling with that still. Anyway, life and writing are inexplicable.
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